Golden Comments

A touching story so impressively narrated in a beautiful poem.

God has found her and given her his holy strength, ... oh so nice....10 god has found' and given good round she has her strength with religious wave length

past is past. look for the future. beauty is before you. nature invites you to adjust with thee. Silence moves her spirit, that is her mark, Eamon will be waiting in his suit, crisp, cool, God has found her and given her his holy strength, To unbound her. an xlent emotional write. never stop.

God has found her and given her his holy strength to unbound her. lovely write.

A captivating story in rhyme and rhythm, very expressive!

the tender touch of falling rain, ............... Felt it Hazel. This is a beautiful piece. wonderful utilization of poetic license. You have got ability to write narrative poems. Keep it up. I loved the way you have used all the figures of speech. This is not a mere show of words but wonderful use of words that enhance the beauty of your poem.

Your power of narration is quite outstanding. I thought the first stanza was awesome and then the 2nd got better than the first and the 3rd was better than both the 2nd and the first. You have done well. It is spell bounding.10/10

Great imaging.. Tragic story full with hope.. Great write.. :)

Excellent. Many write poems but a few are poets. You are one one of them. Middle aged, she feels like a blank page, without a pen, /Without a thought, very touchy speech, personal but universal.

A composition that a tells a tale of the ebbs and the floods of her life. Enviable execution and endearing diction indeed Hazel.

very nice.. your diction is good..i was worried because the poem ended soon..: (

very nice imagery.. excellent writing... my favorite part.. Suddenly a golden beam shines from the heavens above, The beauty of the lass appears, Her skin softens, eyes gleam, Her heart embraces this strange light, Her prescence is a gift, As her soul lifts. -Shaleheen

Wow! That's all strikes my mind as i read your composition. First thing is the theme. Second is vocab, I had to sit with dictionary. Third is the way of presentation. I was able to see a gal moving from one place to the other in quest her lost identity. Hazel, I must admit that i took too many lessons out of this composition and i may use your lines in a modulated way sometime in my own compositions, if you don't. Must read cook up for all those who leap in line of writing

Wow! That's all come to my mind after reading this composition. First of all the theme is quite interesting. Second is vocab, i had to verify most of the words. Third is the way of presentation. As I read I was able to see a gal moving from one place to the other in quest of her lost identity. Simply superb..Hazel to be very hones I learned a lot from your composition.