God's Grafitti Comments

Charles, pretty cool. I like the content, its precision and accuracy. As a poem though, it's a little undisciplined, with dead wood, flabby lines and weak images. If you could tighten it some, cut unexciting language, shape the lines into some energetic patterns, this could be a really fine poem. As raw material for something truly strong, it's promising.

I liked the title, so I read it. The thing is, if the title does not perplex me in any way at all, I automatically assume it reflects the content. My point is the title is just as much a work of art as what it, well, titles. I loved it. The bitterness in being colonized is strong in the persona. Keep up the good work, Charles Monroe.