Give Me That Promotion, Sir! Comments

It represents a well known community always murmer. Sir forgetting everything.It touched to me.

Schematic organizing with a high nose of an eagle setting its eyes high in the sky, beautifully sorted and intellectually informed Thanks i like it!

You contestant people are so serious about the poetry contest conducted by poemhunter for 2013 that I see people made phone calls and send unsolicited spasm to each other and I am not left alone , but I had never asked any to vote for my poem ‘’unique ‘’ one, let alone to receive or make phone calls and I wonder how many people understood uniqueness of my poem ‘unique’ and its intrinsic and duality in meaning …simply every one went for the author for ‘’I ‘’ but this insinuates for the universe also , the poems which won prizes some are direct copy from the poems of Rabindranath Tagore (1913 Nobel prize winner) and other two are descriptive poetry without deeper meaning or have any significance or insinuations.

such funny characters are esteemed as high in our social order. It is really painful and ridiculous.There is so much irony which one can feel passing through your lines. It is a paintaking effort I know.

It is not just poem. It is a mirror for the present System. Present scinerion experience is well & excellently nitted by the Writer. He is an Asset to all of us. Thanks for giving me a previledge to my mere humble comment.

Lovely and well crafted poem. This poem is an innovative representation of Superior-Subordinate relations in all offices. Also reminded me of the flattery Julius Caesar is subjected to in Shakespeare's famous novel of the same name. Congratulations

The poem is indeed excellent. Though critics might comment about repetitive usage of 'Sir', believe me, that word alone has made the poem very interesting. Congratulations and Best of Luck.

This is an experimental poem, quite different from my other poems. Of course, the theme is Sycophancy! ! The lines/stanzas of the poem embody a combination of the following: - (1) Actual dialogue between the narrator and his/her sir (2) the internal monologue of the narrator in the poem, and (3) the thoughts/comments of the independent observer/reader. This may appear surprising to many, but almost the entire dialogue/monologue I have actually heard in real life - in different contexts of course. I have personally seen Jimmys tail being praised in more flowery language than as modestly described in the poem. Of course, the poem is too long, almost verging on tedium. The repetition of sirs is almost jarring. The dialogue often appears extremely irrational. But that is exactly what the poem tries to convey: - the long-winded, irrational, repetitive, jarring and boring supplications of a sycophant - which everybody can easily see through BUT which everybody ultimately falls prey to. The sycophant very well knows that. He knows that people do not really like him for his pestering, but he also knows that ultimately his heart's desire will get fulfilled..... |

I thank all the readers who have submitted their thoughtful comments below. Special thanks to Ravindran Nair for his deep, incisive analysis. I wrote the poem in about 40 minutes in a single go, with very little editing thereafter. I wanted to confine the poem to 40 lines, but my friends who read it, suggested that I keep the poem as it is, and not to bother about the contest. However, in future editions, the poem will be revised and pruned on the valuable feedback received from all readers! ! I request all readers to vote/rate it exactly on its merit.

I would have liked the poem had it been halved in size. Also, in its 64 lines there are as many as 43 'sir's. Even for a self-seeking sycophant, this is a little too much and a trifle jarring. The poet could well have forcefully conveyed the message through subtle references to some, or all, members of the superior officer's family, as also the dog, instead of going to such detail as rendered..As for Jimmy, I think the narrators's references are stretched too far, to the point of tedium. Perhaps with a further revision, or two, this could have been made a very good poem. Best Wishes, Ravindran Nayar

very nice poem, funny and heart touching. I like very much this poem

very nice poem, funny and heart touching. I like very much this poem

very nice poem, funny and heart touching. I like very much this poem

shown the mirror on the happenings :) - nice presentation

Beautiful poem...and not less than 10...it deserves....loved the lanuage

Hi Tapan, I find the poem interesting in as much as the input required to massage the ego there in your culture is much different that that experienced here in in the west (Canada): not that flattery doesn't exist here, but it's less employed. Poetry to me is a unique literary form of expression. Great poetry writes itself, the job of the poet is simply to channel the words as they are received... thus beauty is expressed in words; beauty which goose-bumps Soul. The English romantics - Keats, Shelly, Byron; Wordsworth are my favorites closely followed by Longfellow, Thoreau, Whitman, and Frost. The less the head, the more the heart, the more surrendered the channel, the better the poet. Cheers!

Cheers! Hitting the right heads.

Very well put. Such people exist, survive and prosper in all walks of life. No way to avoid them.

very good take on sycophancy

nice work, everything can be said in different ways.