Girl From The Grave Comments

Some great lines here, i love it

Impressive write...Inventive stanzaic construction...If I could be so bold to recommend that you be cautious in over-employing the use of isolation-parenthesis....When you want to express a thought within a thought for the Reader, consider isolating that line as a separate, single-spaced line...in parenthesis, so that the Reader will realise your intent....I enjoyed this read, young lady...Keep that pen pumping ~FjR~