Ghost Tracks Comments

very original and superb in style, bringing out both the shades of life...

Oh this is sublime. Should I say that? the penultimate stanza is especially fine. HG: -) xx

hmmmmmmm ver sad.......hey hugs to cheer u up...well penned

O MUH GOSH DAT IS GOOD! ! ! VERY INTENSE LIKE I CAN FEEL WAT UR GOIN THRU

O MUH GOSH DAT IS GOOD! ! ! VERY INTENSE LIKE I CAN FEEL WAT UR GOIN THRU

A stunning poem sad and intense with a great deepth Thanks Ivor

the last stanza lines are exceptionally good...round and round in the ghost tracks...well, here i see a different writer in you...a difference for good 10

We need to be awake, alert, to know what is happening to us and feel it to the fullest; to know what is we are seeing. pain is as deep as deep as is pain round and round we go and we know that - that counts for a lot. Deep, Thoughtful, Moving. We breathe in and we breathe out and breathe in again.

I love the rhyme in this one... its easy on the senses (I don't usually like rhyme... i know) did you write this in your proverbial 'blue period? :) incredible poem.

Deeply felt poem David. Conveys desperateness and yet an engaging awareness that we need to break free. Cheers to that!

An incredibly powerful poem with lines that linger long after the reader has left the page. Haunting, heart wrenching and full of original phrasing bound together with an effortless flow and a reounding last line. Superb...

I like this one, David...the pain is palpable...the ghosts real...and your lament is true, I think. Raynette

There are so many shades to us David, thankyou for sharing your feelings Take care Love duncan X

Hey David, this is good, very soul-searching. Agree with Onelia, my fav lines are definitely 'friends over family, fire over rain'. They say we can't pick our family but we can our friends. S1 makes for tense reading. A hard hitting poem. Enjoyed (if that makes sense?) HG; -) xx

This is well-penned, heart-wrenching, provoking and engaging in equal measures. t x

Very nice work deep and thoughtful thanks Ivor