Tuesday, October 25, 2022

Gas And Fire Comments

Rating: 5.0

I did 'love you, ' 'missed you, '
'want to? ' 'Can I kiss you? '

Those same old responses from years pasts.
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Victor Aguilar
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MAHTAB BANGALEE 26 October 2022

Instead of being silk: so soft, so warm, 'sleep fuel! ' We were Gas and Fire, too hot, never cool. ~ WRITTEN BEAUTIFULLY; NICE THE READ THE POEM

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Victor Aguilar 26 October 2022

Thank you so much just came to me in a moment of feelings.

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The closing expression "I am lying to fix my heart" gives the reader a "thud! ".. surprisingly beautiful.

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Victor Aguilar 26 October 2022

Thank you so much, this poem was one I originally written as one big poem. Although I felt like it would have made more of an impact if I spilt the big one up.

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