These things of pangs unknown by name,
I feel that they are familiar.
These aches and sores are all that and the same,
I feel they are strange hence forth all too peculiar.
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I can feel the fear and anxiety that you are trying to express, Cupid. I believe, though, that this poem would benefit from greater syntax variety: 'I feel' needs to be replaced with alternative expressions which should maintain if not enhance the continuous flow of ideas. That's my opinion, anyway. Best wishes, Gina.
poetry may need to improve but your feelings do come through loud and clear!