Tuesday, February 14, 2006

Frustration Comments

Rating: 4.5

These things of pangs unknown by name,
I feel that they are familiar.
These aches and sores are all that and the same,
I feel they are strange hence forth all too peculiar.
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Sadistic Cupid
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Malini Kadir 07 April 2008

poetry may need to improve but your feelings do come through loud and clear!

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Gina Onyemaechi 14 February 2006

I can feel the fear and anxiety that you are trying to express, Cupid. I believe, though, that this poem would benefit from greater syntax variety: 'I feel' needs to be replaced with alternative expressions which should maintain if not enhance the continuous flow of ideas. That's my opinion, anyway. Best wishes, Gina.

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