From A Window (Revision) Comments

Hugh, fantastically rich. You've got me thinking now about revision in general. Greg is right about the additional texture. Grand indeed.

As an advocate of the revision, (as is Wen) this new version is greatly improved via some added moxey. As you had stated, Hugh, the original was very much a prose type piece, which was all well and good, but you've managed to enhance the number with the laying on of more poetic textures. Good show, ole chap! Respectfully, Greg

Hugh this was an amazing poem, but also love the ease in this revision. The imagery delightful and soothing, a very spiritual effect in your description. A gift for your readers. :) ♥ Angie

I loved this the first time around, the nature and the poetry and finally the spirit, you might be a guru! !

Hugh this is a wonderfully descriptive write. I've noticed this about birds myself. Joyce

From this window I love spiritual messages. You know, sometimes I sit here trying to think of what to say. To say 'Thank You' is enough here. Beautiful poem Hugh! GOD Bless! Delilah

i did enjoy the original, Hugh, and arguably, you've topped yourself. i do like the alliteration, the pause-of-thoughts, the flashes from nature and the accompanying images, the utterly wondrous conclusion. you've achieved excellence in poetry. outstanding writing.

This is a re-write of this poem originally posted 5/11/06. I think it's not so prosey now (at least I hope so.) Hugh