Friday, January 4, 2008

French Bus Ride Home - Comments

Rating: 4.8

The bus was packed
made my way from front to back
seat by chance found
youth - leg astraddle; sat down
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Gillian.E. Shaw
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David Desantis 16 April 2008

thats a very nice poem. It's great that some people still have respect. I really liked this, you captured the scene with excellent imagery, and grace. I can imagine how you felt with your legs pushed out in the isle, I almost got a sense of trepidation, and then relief. Great job. Check out my stuff if you get a chance.

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