Not bad...the flow was steady, the rythm was on time, and the rhyme, except for a few repetitive words was fair. I did read in there quite a bit of personal struggles. It seemed only slightly obscured for rhyming purposes and overall I did connect with it. I think I would give it a more fitting title.
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Not bad...the flow was steady, the rythm was on time, and the rhyme, except for a few repetitive words was fair. I did read in there quite a bit of personal struggles. It seemed only slightly obscured for rhyming purposes and overall I did connect with it. I think I would give it a more fitting title.