Freedom In Cage Comments

i think the last line was very very deep and thoughtful...i liked ur poem... :)

Excellent writing You must write with a golden pen The words love you. 'Cage Of Every One Is As Big As His Dream Of Freedom! ' How true but how difficult for us to live up to Wishing you joy Pia

Very moving poem. If we allow our mind to be free then we will be too. Very nicely done. KK

This a short yet powrful one...are you really amature or you are just posting poems now? ? ? Anyway its great work yashar

I wonder - why is it only at rank 454 today? Should it not have been higher up in the pedastal? This is a masterpiece of its sort.... the mastery reflects in every line... the imagery stands-up in every word to reflect the theme of the poem!

The Wind Laughed In His Sleeve and Told First, Try To Bear the Pain of Homelessness and Vagrancy Homelessness can be so demoralizing and yet many come through it, and sometimes much stronger We must all spare a thought for those who are in a less fortunate set of circumstances than our-selves Love duncan X

Very nice imagery here. I enjoyed the serenity that came to mind as I read your words. Great read. :) bobbie

fine poem, Yashar. Created a fine image. Barbara James

Yashar, I like the appeal of this. 'Freedom, ' in essence, as a state of mind in which each of us has power to expand our own thoughts and dreams as we see fit. And, it's up to us as individuals to do so. Good write! Brian

Wonderful poem, bearing the pain of the homeless would certainly be walking in another man's shoes, what better way to know the suffering of others but to suffer oneself. I find your poem interesting, one of deep thought. I feel you as a poet was able to bring the reader into the poem. Fine penning, keep writing, I look forward to reading more of your work. Thankyou---Melvina---

excellent peace of work! i love it, bro!

Very interesting piece, well thought

Very touching and eloquent. We are always free in the landscapes of our minds. Write on, Yashar. Kindest regards, Sandra

this is a very good poem.you have linked the pain of homelessness to freedom.it is very correct.it is just like the kite.once the string is broken, the kite will not go up, it will lose its way

As human beings, we all have our jails; some are big while some are small and till we die, we all have to carry our crosses. They may be big or small. What I mean to say is that freedom is only relative and while we are alive, we can only struggle and try to make the burden lighter, that's all.

i liked ur poem very much.indeed, true freedom is not easy to achieve.the poem can have elaborate explanations. keep it up

I liked this, but remeber you can always use more lines, it just makes it a bit more readable. Nick

The idea is good and this being your first poem, it is nice you have come out with your hidden talent. You can do more like this to bring out the best out of you. Rajaram R

Yashar, I like this poem. I recommend you take a look at the spelling of homelessness. Freedom In Cell says that within each 'cell' there is a freedom to connect since with each 'cell' there is life! L

freedom is everywhere we just need to know it is there some look forever and are never aware in the heart it is there :)