Free Comments

I've always been told haikus aren't supposed to rhyme, so I like how you broke free of those restraints. It's clever how journey and eternity rhyme, and eternity and free rhyme, but journey and free don't seem to very well. It sort of sections it, like you are on a boundless journey but your destination, eternity, is limited and it restrains you. Then it's like you have those limits, but you crave to be free. I really enjoyed the complexity of this haiku.