Frayed Plume Comments

Alan, I like this one. Best of the three you've posted in my opinion. A suggestion: resist the urge to add notes after the poem. Good poems speak for themselves, and this one is better than most. The poem is good not because it expresses well your experience, but because in reading and pondering it, it becomes my experience.

Hi Aan.....Tell you what, I felt as though I was on that bus when reading this.........very good poem.