Fragments Comments

Your deepest feeling on past has been so touhingly expressed. From the beginnning it is marked that...My past is bleeding with hurt and hardship, I'm like a slave to memories of wounds from the whip /Of cruel destiny, of harsh words from the lips, Beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing.

(cont.) punctuation? perhaps not as i would do it, trying (me) to stick to the rules i learned years ago, BUT i like your method of using commas; i had no trouble following your writing. Thanks. bri :)

SOMEONE'S past is certainly dark, but there is hope from MY EYES? ? ! ! ! good grief! i'm not sure i can handle the responsibility. i love the rhyming, a bit of alliteration, and the smooth flow of the lines into one another, and the 'story'. favorite line: Home is too far away, too far away, (cont.)

i plan to return to this one tomorrow or the day after. i must read again and leave more of a comment. to MyPoemList. bri :)

My past is bleeding with hurt and hardship, I'm like a slave to memories of wounds from the whip , , , , , , , , , , , , , , wow! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! so emotional! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! So I get lively your poems, ....... you are obviously more emotional, I have gone through the poem got the fact, thanks for sharing the poem with us,10

So vividly described the emotions lived in soul's pain and sufferings.A wonderful picture although painfull, like the tragodies in which through their pain projected you feel your heart's catharsis.

Back to life. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

Quite poignant.....I can feel the agony in every line! Don't live in the past, Hazel! Embrace the present and live in hope of the future! A very touching write!

Wow, I can feel the pain between each line, and the visuals are fantastic, a great write Hazel I so enjoyed reading this. Annette

Wonderful heartfelt poem. The pain of the past remains as is. Nice one my friend.10+++

That's why I wrote the Butcher Very therapeutic I found For me.. James.. or.. iip