Fragmented Thoughts, Or, Wasting Time Comments
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Yes, I am fully aware of it Fabrizio.. I was experimenting with a 'poem', and all that came into my mind was a series of 'fragmented thoughts' that I tried to connect into a poem.. It's a 'caricrature' of a poem, not a 'poem'.. The intention behind writing this and publishing this was basically to just see how would people react to it, if I posted this.. It's just a collage of thoughts that make no sense at all... I will definitely try to write something better next time :)
This is today's poem - I like the immediacy of reading a poem just composed. This poem, however, will always have immediacy, because that's its essence. It burns with the passion of a poet, and the flames leap high into the air and offer heat and illumination. But poems cannot really change the world by themselves, they are words on paper not actions. But they can change the inner world of both writer and reader. And I felt this poem in my depths. The way you wrote in short, emphatic, striking numbered stanzas was an inspired format. Each one offered a brief moment of insight and then closed. Cumulatively, they expressed the feelings and thoughts that will never fully resolved, but for the duration of the poem, writer and reader alike, we can master the situation.
Thank you very much sir for your kind comment. I intended to write a poem where I may somehow allow the readers to generate the meaning(s) . If I have even succeeded in doing that even a little bit, I feel humbled :)
Daniel, I agree with you only in part Indeed, Souren can write a much better poetry: these verses are more 'good thoughts' than real Poetry. He has simply put his thoughts in a poem format and posted them without stopping - first - to ponder deep about his ideas.. Too many 'poet', here, just write some lines and think ''here is a poem to post''.. as if having hundreds or thousands of such poems posted at PH (or elsewhere) means '' being an important poet ''. Writing a poem is not just filling a page with (few or many) verses. It is a work of chiseling.. a work where, first, your mind has to fly high.. well over the daily events.. then delve deep into them and into yourself.. I know that Souren has a poetic mind. For such a reason I prefer being a bit more demanding toward his poetry.. and I invite Souren, as a poet friend and colleague, to spend more time on his verses, before posting them.. I ask your pardon, Souren: you are a poet, for sure, but I want you to become a VERY GOOD poet.. Understand? Blessings
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7/18/2025 6:19:03 PM # 1.0.0
Definitely it was worth reading your scattered and fragmented thoughts. There is a central thread tying all those broken thoughts together. That is your infatuation for a girl and finally its 'miscarriage' and the heart ache it gave you. The love a boy who is hardly 24 felt, however deep it may be, can be seen just as a mere infatuation by an elderly person like me and it is time for you to come out of this trauma! When a mature person looks at life, how differently one sees it! Souren...... Life is quite different from the romantic fictional stories....... There is a long way for you to go and don't think that unless you get a particular pair of hands to hold you, you will fall fatally! Who knows, stronger hands are there to hold you and lead you all through your journey to safe harbours!