Fourteen Lines Comments

Good as it gets.

Quite right, John. It was planned to demonstrate poetry's 'baser self'. I put it up because we were talking about the sonnet in the Forum, and the constrictions of rhyme.

i dont agree with some of the points because it really shows your baser self but the ending was really well executed. it leaves the earlier part of the poem disturbing.

Altough I usually reserve comment on sonnets as I feel they are a form not to be messed with - this one did work for me Michael - it flowed effortlessly.. Good job, Sxx

Very good sonnet, Michael. You know I like these, my friend, and you've turned the phrases with a deft pen.