Saturday, September 12, 2009

> Fornication..A Collection Of 7 Deadly Sins Comments

Rating: 3.7

For evil live in her core
Hiding waiting to pop out
She will lift her pretty face
To conceal the dangers within
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Eyan Desir
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Ananthakumar S 19 October 2009

Truth & Just Truth alone. Great way of expression

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Chris G. Vaillancourt 12 October 2009

Wonderful, vibrant work!

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Anusha Subramanian 02 October 2009

A very creative theme.. Nice flow of words.. You said it, what you had.. Way to go..

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Antonio Liao 01 October 2009

wow! a sweet surrender tail with pain.....making the best to be true and lead a power to convey the dunes of strength into the horizon of faith.....that makes every person strong....facing the trail of life...there is the hope and the wisdom to face of what the world gives.... at least you share your pain and the courage to let pain and victory surrender to what your faith believes.....and let the face of your wonder seduce the temptation pause... a very powerful poem...that gives the reader to go beyond of what is the past...thank you for sharing your thought....God bless....a 10 +++++

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Jen Capaldi 26 September 2009

nice write on a creative theme. you have a very vivid and imaginative way of writing. the trick of the seductress or the sucubus is to lure you in first with the sweetest of smiles and then trap you with the temptations of the even better things to come that conceals their true purpose. very well written, my friend.10+ Jen

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Tom Fox 26 September 2009

i don't dig on the godly biblical overtone but i'm guessing you've been crushed by a woman and take revenge through poetry...i've done that, too...

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Seema Chowdhury 25 September 2009

hi, a nice poem with good flow and keep the reader flow in its words. pl see some of my poems too.

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* Naphright * 23 September 2009

i know that's right, but it is a man too! no laughing situation

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Anand Madhukar 21 September 2009

A bit strident, but a great write nevertheless.

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Aparna Sinha 21 September 2009

lovely! ! great write.... i enjoyed it...*smile*

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Christina Phan 19 September 2009

fanastic job and sweet one 10+

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The Lost.. 19 September 2009

Your poem is great..... keep writing thisi's really nice

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Jerry Hughes 18 September 2009

Been there, done that! Cheers, Jerry

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Elsee Daniel 18 September 2009

sweet sin: } sweet poem: } good job,10+: }

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Carol Gall 18 September 2009

well written one more deadly sin 10

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Catrina Heart 17 September 2009

Fabulous eloquent piece of sin....Great poetic lines..........Thanks 10/10

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Chamekka Jones 17 September 2009

WOW! ! THAT IS SO DEEP! !

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Anand Madhukar 13 September 2009

Very well penned, so much so that the forbidden fruits appear more alluring than ever!

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Joseph Poewhit 12 September 2009

Don't forget about the AIDS

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