For The Longest Time Comments

Danny, I like the form you've chosen, the images, the development, the release of the tension in the dénouement. But, like the others, I have no clue what your poem is about! Are you going to help us?

They watched over! With the muse of life. Thanks for sharing.

Some very strong imagery, particularly in the last three stanzas. But I agree with Madhavan, I'm wrapping my head around some obscurities. Extremely fine effort.

When reading a new poem, I try to get the writer's tone of voice, the content that I can paraphrase, the rhythm, cadences, structure, the imaginative novelty, the images that seem apt, and finally, my own wish to read it again. Some contributions are, to me, beyond these norms, if the metaphors are jumbled up and abstractions are personified. Sorry, I cannot make out an each day shirt, springtide of native tongue, pollen grains dust'n' fury in the opening verse. I recall some writer saying it is more difficult to write good prose than obscure poetry.

Articulate poem indeed...They saw hands From a curtain drawn, A malevolent form Now at silent peace, And understood for the longest time.

this reminds me of a song.....

'They realised relief From ageless consternation, Unclenched all disbelief Welcoming consideration, And finally released, Drifted away.' Wow! Simply wow! For all the poems I have read today, this one stands out to be most well-articulated and carefully, almost painstrickingly, crafted to perfection. The meaning(s) , of course, is entirely open to interpretations of the readers which is an amazing thing. Maybe this poem was about 'they' leaving their fleshly bodies and going to a spiritual path (their souls wandering around before they reach heaven? ?) .. Hard to be certain about.. But a wonderfully crafted poem Danny.. Thanks and respect..

Beautiful and meaningful poem. Enjoyed it's rhyme. Thanks for sharing.10 points.

Elusive but receptive to our own interpretations. A thousand different meanings.

A poem beautifully written, whose meaning is somewhat cryptic to the reader. The deep thoughts of a deep mind Danny. We thank you for sharing.

A magical flow of words with an unknown story behind. Beauty, sadness and now peace.

Above my head too Danny - an explanatory note would have helped. But it is well crafted and enigmatic.

sensitive, and never sought a reason why, unless 'why' was 'ageless consternation'

A challenging read indeed! so one can take a due advantage of the statement that poetry is open to interpretation depending on the whims of the readers...when i didn't get anything from the poem, i resorted to comments, which are written neutral, denying any clue to what it is all about...now i think some weaving about the lives of those who are suppressed beings in any capacity, politically suppressed i suppose...and they too in an attitude of a long caged bird which has lost the art of flight, and the will to escape! ! ! (it is all supposed, might be wrong completely) , but for the poem, its language is reader-friendly, when you start you end it too! ! ! thanks! ! !

An elegant and softly flowing poem like silver water. Your use of language so beautiful that I just drifted away 10/10 BB

Nice Ending. I really like the language here. Your choice of words is perfect and I'll be listing this one as one of my favorites.

Challenging poem! I read careful and wonder who are they? Asking myself: human? ..naah too nicely described also they always have a great desire of flight. Could be some sort of seeds or many other things, what about trees? Worms? Ashes? Gee, this is quite beautiful and deep, read it again and again each time will blow my mind away! Giving up I may never guess the right answer. Great food for thought, thank you for share!

Agreed with all here, deep and beautiful...as much look alike a valley with hidden treasure...have to read many times to feel it..lovely and deep_SOul

With your explanation, now I get the beauty of the poem! Indeed esoteric and too deep for the average! This is above ranking! Thanks for the kind comments.... Danny!

As Bob has rightly put, this is too deeeep! ! I made some vain efforts to explicate it.... but still remains elusive! From the state of remaining stagged without desire of flight, finally they got relieved from ageless consternation! A positive note? ?