Sunday, December 6, 2009

For Realz Comments

Rating: 2.5

For the love will be forever permanent
Unerasable from our memories
the pain will hurt just as much as it ever has
the joy will ring in your ears for years to pass
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Emily Sleator aka Katastrophic Kyte3 NopyGirrl
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Kevin Carney 04 August 2010

Nice write, I like your style its not stuffy and is your own don't give that up. The only thing I had was the last line it took me a few reads to get it to flow. It's a good write.

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Haha, that last line was a little funny. But I know it's serious, and I know what you mean. Sometimes it's impossible to explain why something like that happens. Good expression though.

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