For Mel (Villanelle) Comments

Within the set structure of the villanelle you have written this poem successfully and poignantly. The structured rhyme form and refrain, believe me, gives it so much more definition. It is so very creative and so very beautiful... 10 Karin Anderson

An obviously very moving subject which reminds me of the death of a daughter of a friend this week last year. That aside, I admire the structure of your poem, and like the fact that you carry one line over between one stanza and the next - I didn't even know you were 'allowed' to do that, so it has inspired me to experiment, thankyou!

The form fits this philosophical and heartrending poem perfectly. Life's injustice shouts from the repeating lines, leaving the raw pain of loss burning in the reader's mind long after the final word of this truly admirable villanelle.

I dread that I should ever feel this pain, but know you have eloquently questioned the unfairness of fate's careless finger. Danny.

You show a mastery of the villanelle here, Paul...and it seems quite appropriate for the pain which comes in waves within this wonderful poem. I shall add it to my favorites. Raynette

So sad but so beautiful aswell. It's so deep and brings a tear to my eyes. Great Job! I love it! =)