Saturday, August 27, 2011

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Love is just like a dove, it gasps becoz it needs to stay
even the gnaw brays, as if one is on a help me tray.
it makes me smile but at-times i get silly!
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Jack Williams 27 August 2011

The ideas are certainly there. I will say, however, if your writing a prose poem, use prose. Don't use 'text speak' and make sure the sentences read properly. E.G. 'bt there only one hidden secret from our eyes' Should read 'but there is only one hiden secret from our eyes'

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