Flame Comments

A sense of originality protrudes throughout this poem, especially in this day in age. Tells a story, almost as a folk song would. Reminds me of times much more simplex. Nostalgia of a time before my time. Great work

although it is a poetic liberty yet singulsar noun is used after many a anyhow the poem is meaningful

wonderful hyperbolical metaphor Light cracks the horizon wonderful symbolistic poem 10

This is lovely. 'Alone burns the flame'...my favorite line.

Shan, so very nice poem truth well luwi

t has lit many-a-lamps; I know of its disquiet; Flame to flame akin! ..........................as it steeps in red, wonderful expression by the imagery, thanks for sharing

a symbolic poem....and the abstract thoughts had been written there are so many interpretation to this write...with the last stanza...means to continue what has it been started with power (flame) akin to its purpose....and thats what poetry is.. you have to analyze whats the thoughts means...you did it right....

The way you felt it and jot in down..it's really very good. For me the last line looks fine where it is. Keep movin'.

I interpret the last stanza as a statement of connection between the writer and the flame. The mixture of the pleasure of helping and the solitary sacrifice needed in order to supply that help is what the final stanza conveys to me. As long as I'm giving input on this poem, it seems the third and fourth stanzas could trade places. The third stanza seems a fitting end to the poem where as the fourth stanza almost seems like a post script or an afterthought. I like your poem, it has history, beauty and a sense of service, inferred texture and a graceful lack of wordiness (unlike this commentary) -be well.

a flame to light everyone of us... a great message is powerfully, successfully expressed here really a light for us too... lighting us, igniting us to reflect.... 10+++ Lovelots, Maia

Hi Vir - I nicely structured poem with good metre and rhythm lovely to recite. Excellent content with eastern Mystery. I have sored it a TEN. V 1 A flame is so so important - in the desert - and it is important to have someone - such as a Fakir (A religious person who performs feats of endurance) to keep it alive. V 2 The universal flame (protected by the Fakir) is available equaly to the Loner or the Caravan - the hospitality of the Desert. V 3 Morning comes the camp fires are extinguished and the caravans move on but 'Alone burns the Flame'. V 4 The Fakir soliliquises 'It has lit many-a- lamps - I know of its disquiet - Flame to Flame akin! '. What can we learn from this elegant poem. The importance of supply and demand - the Travellers all need a Flame - The Fakir becomes a Universal Supplier - of Flame - to all travellers irrespective of Class - Creed - Culture. The poem makes us ask ourselves what are we protecting and providing (free to all) in our own Community. We can all be Fakirs keeping something alive for the benefit of All! Yours in Poetry - JOHN

This is a great poem, Has a lot of feeling, Luv it^^

A flame can set the world on fire.

wowwwwwww it has lit many a lamps it will never die it is eternal good poem structure and composition -10 anjali