A good effort well chosen words and a clear theme Ashley But you need to learn about meter. The varying line lengths of your poem make it choppy to read aloud
Meter is the essential difference between poetry and prose. Try to get hold of a good source book which explains meter and the various poetry forms/.Miller Williams Patterns of poetry or lewis Turcos Book of forms. There are some good sites on the net The poets Garret which will also help you ivor
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A good effort well chosen words and a clear theme Ashley But you need to learn about meter. The varying line lengths of your poem make it choppy to read aloud Meter is the essential difference between poetry and prose. Try to get hold of a good source book which explains meter and the various poetry forms/.Miller Williams Patterns of poetry or lewis Turcos Book of forms. There are some good sites on the net The poets Garret which will also help you ivor