Saturday, August 15, 2009

Fire Comments

Rating: 5.0

I am mesmerized by your charm and beauty
The orange innocuous appearance reveals soft and silky
It draws me closer and I feel like relishing gleefully
Your touch, embrace and vicinity.
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Swatimalya Chattopadhyay
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Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK 13 June 2010

Yeah...fire does it …fireworks ‘eye-candy’…when used…but when misused turns into ‘Eye blister’… It is one of five Holy Primordial Elements of everything…and does all what you’ve appealed for…but it is like ‘handle with care’…do we do that Ma’am…? Its said a completely bad thing as rare as completely good thing…so virtuality of goodness and evilness are there in every thing…here it like a chant euphonic…and conceived nicely… Well this fire may be symbolized our ‘fire in mind’ which is more dangerous that this fire just you portrayed as happened two world wars… and still happening [historic days just to mention there are many more examples in mythology &c] Ms. Nivedita UK 10/10

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Fire...so enchanting. Always changing shape. Well written

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Siddharth Singh 15 March 2010

...and i am mesmsrised by the way you have written this.

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Eyan Desir 02 November 2009

Fine a nd a beautiful poem

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 08 September 2009

Can't you retain your beauty Without endangering life? Can't you restrict your chasteness Only to sanctify our minds? ..........what a holy words and wish to sanctify the minds... oh so beautiful feelings.. o lolved it....10 read mine no advice, please.... samsher..... fishing in troubled water...

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Vinod Kumar 27 August 2009

Really an arrow of fire in fine hearts..Thanks for sharing 10++

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Surya . 23 August 2009

a wonderful poem on fire. being a top official in steel plant you had first habnd experience in fire. but is different too. please read mypoem 'fire and flower'.voted10 love surya

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Chitra - 19 August 2009

wonderful expression through mesmerizing images, a great metaphor resonating with emotions

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Marieta Maglas 18 August 2009

''Can't you retain your beauty Without endangering life? Can't you restrict your chasteness Only to sanctify our minds? '' wonderful poem, well written..........10

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Anjali Sinha 18 August 2009

do you know how much your poem has mesmerized me-- its flow and grace transcends that 'fire' that you have ignited wow a really beautiful poem surely a 10+++++ lots of love anjali

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 17 August 2009

Please show us the beacon When we are drifted in the sea But never ever grab any life To offer it to the hands of destiny.......love nhate can't go together.you should have faith in your love. it is so sacrad and has to be kept till the last breath.But yes ther are misgivings and fears. It got to beeternal in the sense that it takes to thelovely end of goal.........beautiful one i admire it....10 read mione o, lord.....humble submission....prayer...i m disgrace....serious thoughts

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Sarwar Chowdhury 17 August 2009

Fine pictograph! Ammmmmazing wording! 10+

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Mystic Indian 16 August 2009

a deep poem, though one cannot agree with 'a mere closeness makes me feel how cruel you are'.. is thoroughly 'fear through lack of understanding of the core 'element'. but since you've ended it like like a prayer it gives a different perspective..on the whole, an interesting point of view.10/10 and you get my vote too.

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Dr.subhendu Kar 15 August 2009

But alas! a mere closeness Makes me feel how cruel you are The signs of your cruelty Are left in the form of a blister................. alas! yet it scars the skin by silky touch inflaming grace of beauty yet imprints a seal when stamping........wonderful expression by the imagery and metaphors, and that is perhaps the cruelty of beauty when touched upon, as luscious glow inflames inflicting the softness of semblance as when entices upon, most ingeniously crafted over the curve of innocence,10+++, thanks for sharing

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