Finish The Fragment- - Just For Fun! ! Comments
This is an incomplete poem I began at the tender young age of 20 years, in the midst of angst-ridden youth. (Fortunately, my thinking is different now!) Much of my poetry on this site is a mish-mosh from different time periods in my life. This particular one has forever remained a fragment - -to date- - hence, the title. I wondered what it would be like to allow our wonderful worldwide community of talented poets to have a go at completing this poor orphaned fragment. Let's see how we all do! My only 2 requests are:
1.) Please preserve the original rhyme scheme, and
2.) Please be nice!
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I cried to my Lord why hast thou forsaken me Because my son, you're the Devil you see That was fun PP.
Nope; the devil wears a red suit, and not feathers! This sounds more so an ending that Nude & Rude or Another Crow might have posted. Of course this was fun for you, because of your & Judy's little poetic duets. You've had lots ot experience collaborating with another to create a finished work. Wish there was more of that sort of cooperation going on here at PH. Thanks Crow.
Night after night, I cried to my Lord I cried to my Lord and I questioned His will. I cried to my Lord please help me understand That lessons I learnt is the work of your hands
Hannah, that is a fine ending! Everyone here is batting 1,000 so far! :)
I cried to my Lord please answer me...so that with love my soul is free..
Lorraine Margueritte, this is a very good ending, as well! I am very pleased with the response I got to this, and am enjoying my fellow poets' take on this!
I cried to the Lord and he came to me To answer the questions which confused me...Rini's version Nice poem poetess, you should complete it..
That sounds just like a Rini ending, and a Rini reply- - sweet as honey! I actually like your ending..... Hmmm, does this mean I don't need to finish it ?
I cried to the Lord but I heard no reply perhaps that will come on the day that I die Of course my ending would reflect me not you dear poetess. I think you should finish this poem yourself. It is no poem to be ashamed off al all. You should see some of the stuff I wrote at 20.
LOL! That sounds exactly like a Barry reply, and a Barry finale for this poem. Aren't we glad we're not 20 anymore? Great bodies back then, but I don't miss the angst one bit!
The poem which was not completed before 20 years can be completed today with much care. Night after night you cried before Lord. You questioned many things to him. Day after day you wandered alone. Sun reflected rays and you prayed more. This was amazing poem at that time and now this can be completed with deeper prayer of perception. This poem brings emotion. Brilliant sharing is done really...10
That sounds like a Kumarmani reply- - wise and gracious! I don't know how an unfinished poem can justify a '10', but thank you!
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An Ever So, Heart Felt Poem! ! ! ! ! Beautifully Done! ! ! ! ! If I Were You I Really Wouldn't Change A Word! ! ! ! ! ! Believe God Felt, Your Words And Heard Your Cries, And Was Deeply Touched Inside! ! ! ! ! Just The Way They Are Dear! ! ! ! ! Thank You Ever So Much For Sharing This! ! ! ! ! Beyond Numbers! ! ! ! !
Thanks, Rebecca- - but are you saying just to let it remain as a fragment? (Actually, if I completed it, I'd have to change the title, wouldn't I?) Good to see you, as always!