Finding Me In The Shells Comments

Yeah, for real Allan. The idea is very nice for a teenager, interesting but the arrangement is lacking a certain humph. Try writing in free verse that may help tho u still need to make other adjustments. u will realise that when u r writing in stanzas there is the need for rhymes which may not always work well. please note though that when u r writing in free verse it still needs to flow. what may also help is if u write inspirationally, most writers only write at some times, be it when they r sad, lonely, happy etc. find what works for u and use it. good luck! not bad for a teenager though.

You should rearrange your poem it lacks a certain flow, punctuation marks are missing AJS