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Beautifully written. I enjoyed reading it. The three poems you invited me to read are wonderful. This poem is very good to. For some reason and I have no Idea why; I feel as if this were all coming from a distant time. Well, before I was even alive. Bien!
I like the typical structured form being breached. I hate those who are determined to stick to a text book style. Loved the flow and emotion here. The horrible existence of being so close yet so far and unreachable.
This is by far an extraordinary poem. One is softly projected into the poetic land of dreams and feelings of the poet.in a most captivating way. The metaphors and images caress the mind and heart. A kind of miraculous hypnosis surrounds and makes us weightless, as we travel thru this oneiric world. I believe this elusive love of the poet is poetry itself, in any case beautifully done and unforgettable. To be read many, many times. Truly wonderful, different from anything else and terribly romantic with a sent of the roses of time, infinite and eternal.
Your elusive lover always just out of your reach as you dream of a connection of mind and spirit to capture your butterfly of fleeting affection. Outstanding write!
NICE! I tried doing a Fibonacci sequence like this, within the guidelines of the syllable structure, but it doesn't have the density of content hear. The mirror effect works well especially for the middle, I can see where you were going with it, the problem is the website doesn't have good parameters for keeping the work as you transcribe it in the text box. Stretching outward beyond my means to touch your harmony Not a pickup line you would use to meet a girl, but it works well. Excellent content, and Great execution. If Escher was a poet he would approve
Wonderful! Breaking away from structured form in this FS pattern has helped to or made you create a poetic story of emotional impact that delivers enjoyment and interest to me. Absolutely love it. Geoffrey.
I love this poem for all its qualities: structure, visual and emotional impact! Absolutely Wonderful!
(0) 1 1 2 3 5 8 13... Wow!) Very clever! And pasionate.