Wednesday, August 6, 2008

.feeling Pity Of Myself... Comments

Rating: 5.0

I raise prayers to the sky
feeling pity of myself
I request God for sanity and autoestimate
And dignity to letting go
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Aijaz Asif 10 December 2008

an extremely beautiful write with srtong emotions., as sad and dark poems are my most favorite i loved it..thanks 10+++++ and A++++ rgds asif

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Ben Gieske 11 August 2008

A quote from Dylan thomas. 'When one burns one's bridges, what a very nice fire it makes.'

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Vilma Xelin 11 August 2008

when a stronger feeling is so deeply inside and we must to remove it from our blood... is a kind of suicide, , , you are right! thanks for the comment!

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Jayesh San 11 August 2008

nice..Its a kind of suicide poems...keep it up

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My Svensk 10 August 2008

Wonderful :) Very good: D

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Ben Gieske 09 August 2008

Yeats said that good poetry is a “quarrel with the self” and the reader looks in our that argument through the window of the poem. I see this poem as sort of a quarrel, “sort of” because it sounds like the quarrel is already resolved. You see things clearly (feeling pity of myself.., I request God for sanity and autoestimate - good substitute - I need the strength to accept, I need the understanding and acceptance, I learned the lesson, etc.) and you know what you need even though you are feeling terrible (suspended in the emptiness/of the hollow thoughts/of understanding and drowned...suffocated/ I lose every kind of hope – very strong words) . You tell us exactly where you are at (not everyone who asks for help is really ready to receive it) . I do not get the sense of anguish, desperation, and hopelessness that you must have gone through to reach this point even though you allude to all of your inner turmoil.

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Howard Johnson 07 August 2008

This is quite a intresting piece, It must of took a considerable amount of time to scribe, representing a great out pour of emotion, Thank you for sharing, Vilma

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PERSIAN NIGHTINGALE 06 August 2008

'not everyone who asks for help is really ready to receive it ' Profound, thanks for sharing 10

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