Saturday, June 9, 2007

Father Reading The Morning Paper Comments

Rating: 5.0

haphazard photographs flash smiles in black
and white, show old men smoking life away

I read news printed in dark ink
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Ben Partenay
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Goldy Locks 23 June 2007

bending reason, Ben. good work breaking up the lines, here; fine style. course we all know you have style - not a disclosed fact. Very telling poem. best care, sjg

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Ivan Donn Carswell 09 June 2007

A prophetic final stanza Ben - especially with what precedes it! Fine b&w imagery spiced with tendrils of tobacco smoke. Rgds, Ivan

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