'Beauty was made from her eyes.
Soon they move, I fly into the skies.
Your charming eyes are my light.
When truely at night I lose my sight.
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This is a lovely poem, quite an intense love. A nicely composed piece, pleasure to read
Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon.
The sentiment is very romantic and seems to depict the first rush of love. Do you want a proper critique of the poem as a poem or just on the meaning of the verse? Ruth
It looks like somebody has been bitten by the love bug. (lol) I like it. I can tell you put alot of thought into it and it's very creative. Great Job. :)
One can starve for such beautiful delicious eyes. A wonderful yummy yummy poem.......10/10. Best Wishes Naseer
Catchy title which, leading into quite a surprise subject afterwards, gives an air of extra care to this poem - - rhyming good and flow, although interrupted by irregular metre, is still most pleasant...... a warm and honest write and 10 from Fay..
this is a good poem when someone reads the title they'll think its about food but its about love.......10
yout rhyming is pretty good but lack of meter interrupts the smooth flow read aloud
i love it it is a really good poem much to me thay go with my feelings
wow! that poem is great! ! i really really liked it! keep on! i feel we both have the same type of poetry stay in touch!
You found that hard to reach rhythm, could you have run across the sky even more...yes I think you could have...iip
i love this poem very creative keep up the good work best of wishes Ashleymarie
observant...converse in the delicate itsy bitsy of love language hiding behind a huge cheese burger very nice liked the following remarks too Ben Gieske (5/9/2009 9: 12: 00 AM) Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon. cheers