Tuesday, May 5, 2009

Fast Food Comments

Rating: 3.8

'Beauty was made from her eyes.
Soon they move, I fly into the skies.
Your charming eyes are my light.
When truely at night I lose my sight.
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Delicate Heart
COMMENTS
Saadat Tahir 04 July 2009

observant...converse in the delicate itsy bitsy of love language hiding behind a huge cheese burger very nice liked the following remarks too Ben Gieske (5/9/2009 9: 12: 00 AM) Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon. cheers

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Absent Wryta 10 May 2009

This is a lovely poem, quite an intense love. A nicely composed piece, pleasure to read

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Ben Gieske 09 May 2009

Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon.

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soso Khan 07 May 2009

it was great i loved it alot 10++

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Ruth Walters 06 May 2009

The sentiment is very romantic and seems to depict the first rush of love. Do you want a proper critique of the poem as a poem or just on the meaning of the verse? Ruth

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T S 06 May 2009

A very romantic write...10/10

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Slade Oriley 06 May 2009

It looks like somebody has been bitten by the love bug. (lol) I like it. I can tell you put alot of thought into it and it's very creative. Great Job. :)

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Lynda Robson 06 May 2009

A lighthearted love poem, well written by you, 10 Lynda xx

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 06 May 2009

One can starve for such beautiful delicious eyes. A wonderful yummy yummy poem.......10/10. Best Wishes Naseer

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Fay Slimm 06 May 2009

Catchy title which, leading into quite a surprise subject afterwards, gives an air of extra care to this poem - - rhyming good and flow, although interrupted by irregular metre, is still most pleasant...... a warm and honest write and 10 from Fay..

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Rosalita Fernandez 05 May 2009

this is beautiful, well done!

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this is a good poem when someone reads the title they'll think its about food but its about love.......10

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Ivor Hogg 05 May 2009

yout rhyming is pretty good but lack of meter interrupts the smooth flow read aloud

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brittany 05 May 2009

pretty good! ! ! beauty feeds all... nice job! !

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Nikki White 05 May 2009

i love it it is a really good poem much to me thay go with my feelings

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Maya Hershey 05 May 2009

wow! that poem is great! ! i really really liked it! keep on! i feel we both have the same type of poetry stay in touch!

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James Mclain 05 May 2009

You found that hard to reach rhythm, could you have run across the sky even more...yes I think you could have...iip

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Ashleymarie love 05 May 2009

i love this poem very creative keep up the good work best of wishes Ashleymarie

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Justice For All 05 May 2009

it was really good keep it up.10+++++

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