False Hopes Comments

it's pretty good tiffany keep writing you got talent

Again Tiffany I see you have talent and great ability. Keep working on expanding your subject matter.

I just can't believe that this poem is penned by a teenager! ! Amazing....that's all I have to say.......! ! !

1) Good description. 2) far too many adjectives - a few can be omitted. 3) Even though the emphasis is offered to suspense, the subject is not well analyzed, because of the overwhelming usage of unnecessary words. It needs to be expanded to other worlds, outside that of yours. G.

The daily grind so wonderfully projected :) ... Amazing :) ..

Good golly Miss Tiffany that was brillant. LOVED IT! ! !

I like your extensive use of imagery. Read the poem to yourself OUTLOUD. See how the poem flows from your voice and your interpretation - and add the punctuation accordingly. It will aid in the flow of the poem for both you and the reader. Doesn't remind me of the song - but Gojira's Vacuity video. It's an intense video. You should youtube it. Matty :)

blooming creativity of a young poet!

Just fantastic Tiffy. You are already a poet. Drive in any gear you wish.10/10.

thats deep. you are a amazing writer! ! ! wow why is it that everyone on here that is close to my age sounds so much smarter than i do? i dont even know some of the words u used and im 16. but anyways keep writing! ! !