Like a smoke in the sky
Blew away my burning desires
Pushed by bitter truth
I fell from mountain life
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When we fall from our dreams and realize the bitterness of our lives we become prisoners whose soul yearns to be free.Very good poem makes me think of Eden.
The bridge of wishes made Hope to reach the gate Just for glimpse of fountain love To fill the thirsty soul My plead was put aside I fell from mountain life I don't have write like this, it's amazing, amzing 10
always remember that life is aprecious gift og God. at times it can be painful and trouble some but surely one day the sun will shine and it will fill your life with the colors of hope, Good Luck! ! !
I asked for life to shine Life laughed with gloomy sign Fate giggled with smirk smile I fell from mountain life A tear down slowly slide On the cheek long since dried Heart weeps for dying desires Wailing with silent cry I fell from mountain life Such a Great Great Lines
A beautiful poem with rhythmic value. 'I fell from mountain life'... 10 with love.
After a Fall; we have to rise again... Well expressed emotions... The subject and theme is wonderful, somewhere emotions lack purity when you over try to rhyme it little enthusiastically… Having said that I could relate myself to this theme of Fall… And I am waiting for you to be reincarnated after this Fall… God bless you… Sincerely, Kamran
your emotions are so strong your words show your bare heart...a sensitive one! love and its deception and the pain of a pierced heart shown in a moving write! wishing you genuine love and happiness...always...seema!
an emotional write...emotions overlapping the words there...ten for this couragious fall
Written with great depth and emotional feeling. The first stanza is particularly effective. Thank you for sharing. Kind regards, Sandra
good job aijaz....the waves of sadness in the piece are very strong and moving.