Monday, April 13, 2009

Failed Guardian Comments

Rating: 4.9

With the wings I have been granted
I do not fly straight up to heaven
Instead I am here watching over you
Although I wish I never knew
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You... don't... want me...
COMMENTS
Dans Only 19 April 2009

Reminds me of 'Romeo and Juliet'. Nicely penned.

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Antonaeshia Andrews 19 April 2009

I LOVEEEEEEE IT EXPLAINS ALOT OF WHAT IM GOING THREW I DIDNT EVEN HAVE TO READ THE 3RD LINE B4 I KNEW I WAS GOING TO LOVE IT I THINK YOU HAVE A GIFT AND I HOPE YOU KEEP WRITING CUZ UR AMAZING AND HOPEFULLY YOU'LL BECOME FAMOUS ONE DAY

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Jenna Thomas 19 April 2009

It makes me cry. I don't think about taking my life..but the ones that did...how much they missed...so saaad

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this poem was very influencial for me, it reminded me that life truely is worth living and that there isnt enough time to just give up. if you would, comment anyone of my poems that intrest you? !

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Susan Jarvis 18 April 2009

Fantastic title, emotive content, and some reasonable rhyme and imagery. Well done! S :)

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<font color =fusha>Amy 18 April 2009

Wonderful poem very creative and emotive :)

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Really nice piece of work, Janay. So poignant, heartfelt. You're so young it's sweet! I am going to read some more of your stuff to really get a feel for you and i promise i will get back to you when i've done so Clare x

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Barry A. Lanier 18 April 2009

Very complex thinking from a poet of such a tender age.....

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rago rago 18 April 2009

really a nice thing to read......and you have shared your thoughts........how beautiful in this tender age you writing........always be positive.........

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Ency Bearis 18 April 2009

nicely written poem and very interesting..smooth flow to read the stanzas..good job...10

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Bob Blackwell 18 April 2009

Janay, a well written, but sad poem. Keep writing

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Sarvesh Kulkarni 18 April 2009

this is an interesting poem..... wonderfully inconclusive. hey, keep writing friend. thank you.

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