Fading Sentiment Comments

I like this better than the other two, but you seem a bit preocupied with being what I'd call poetic. Poetry should make us feel and I got a bit cought up in your actual words more than I should. The third stanza is verry good but I'd condense the last line, even though I did like it. I think you are talented and the more you write the more it will show in your work. Thank you for posting each poem that I have read, and I promise to read more.