Extreme Poverty, Of Heart And Mind. Comments

A world that aims for equality, A world that fights poverty, A world that values human worth, A world that finds peace and mirth. Brilliant

We can overcome if we are one and strong.Great verse in totality.

I'm TESTING PH'S 'COMMENTS OF THE POEM' system, as one poet (you) seems to feel it is not working sometimes, and I would NOT be surprise.

More on the philosophical side. This poem is Profound.

(cont.) '1. Action vs. feeling: Compassion requires action to relieve the pain of another, whereas empathy merely requires feeling that pain. Neuroscience indicates feelings of compassion and empathy lead to activation in brain regions like the prefrontal cortex and vagus nerve.' bri : ) or : (

(cont.) [ I think Asim meant 'someone', not 'some' ], , . Also I read that if someone is 'too empathetic' aka feels the emotional pain of another 'TOO MUCH', that someone may suffer emotionally her/himself. (cont.)

(cont.) ...'In the simplest terms, to sympathize with some is to say the right things and convey a supportive message while empathizing is actually understanding what the person is going through and being able to see the situation from the other person's perspective.' (cont.)

I'm back (my earlier comments are not showing yet) . I have more comments, these regarding 'But with compassion and empathy, We can overcome this harsh reality.' I shall paste some quotes from my online research.(cont.)

Excellent piece my dear Asim Bravo! ! ! ! !

Just superb........thanks a lot.....my friend....

A wonderful poem with a meaningful message and great insights. Yes, we could alleviate the effects of poverty with compassion and empathy. A well expressed write. Top Marks!

I strive for, but do NOT STRUGGLE for rhymes in my poems. It usually seems easy for me. I will skip a rhyme if I 'have to', rather than risk losing/corrupting? meaning, flow, or humor in a poem.

P.S.: I liked the title. Oh! I was going to say you did well without using rhymes, BUT now I SEE YOU DID use rhymes, which were pretty good,

I don't feel much like leaving stars, but I'm PRETTY SURE many readers would 'eat this up' aka 'really like this', so I give 3 stars. It WAS somewhat entertaining & it kept me from falling to sleep. bri : )

stanza 5: For ME to overcome the sometimes-harsh realities of life, I think I MIGHT need (every 24 hours) one (or more) LARGE McDonalds meals & a good night's sleep. AND PoemHunter! ! bri : )

stanza 3: 'must'? ? Who is going to make ME do it! ! ! ? I DON'T BELIEVE: 'what affects one, affects us all, ' line 12: 'must' again? ! I don't think I've ever spoken 'philosophically'.

lines 7 & 8: Maybe poetry doesn't 'have to' follow all rules of grammar that prose (at least 'proper' prose) is usually expected to follow (isn't it?) , BUT I say 'neither 7 + 8, nor either by itself is a complete sentence.

lines 5 & 6: Maybe you are overdoing your use of commas, something I think someone told be once that I was (maybe) doing. I'LL say you 'need' NO commas, BUT where is a period which I'd use to end the sentence? ? Hmm?

THEN in stanza 2 you toss 'soul' 'into the ring', the soul, like a professional boxer being in a 'boxing ring' (an area where two fight each other, looking like they have GIANT mittens on their hands. ;)

CORRECTION: NOT 'always' and NOT 'whatever'. stanza 1: you speak of 'heart' and 'mind' as, presumably, deprived of 'human needs'.. Maybe you refer to love and intelligence...for starters? ?