Expression Comments

Expression has been expressed nicely by the poet thank and congratulation

A truly beautiful poem, vulnerable and honest. It had a wonderful rhythm, good word choice and rhymes. Even though it didn't do a whole lot, it accomplished what it needed to. It wasn't about fancy tropes but just getting this crap off your chest, letting the world know, letting someone know. I hope you will find who you are, because you must be a beautiful person to write such beautiful poetry.

A pointing finger at degrading conscience.....a realisation of getting entangled in the web called world......beautiful piem.. congrats

I am going through the exact same thing right now... exact. Lets just keep going. Beautifully written

full with simple words make it more deeper. and clearer. you expressed it the way it should be. i thank my gmail to deliver this beauty to me. :)

Sorry I havent been on in a while Aden....That was a very good poem, but now i wanna know why you wrote it?

I remember when I was 16 in 1964 and all that was happening to me through no fault of my own. These same thoughts ran through me then, and some of them still do because the hurt came from someone I expected to be there for me but wasn't. She was actually the reason behind why I hurt so much during the first part of the 60's. This poem is ageless because these questions have been asked by teens through time immemorial and will continue to be asked by future generations of teens to come. A 10++++ and thank you for sharing. Love & hugs, Barbara

Aden I too was 16...about fifty years ago....my life too was messed up....but do you know who messed it up? ME. I see myself reflected in your words so many years ago...angry. and with an attitude of 'No body loves me every body hates me, I am going down the garden to eat worms'... If you will please listen to me and to others whom you have asked for assistance... you have a natural raw talent... guide your anger and frustrations in a positive way into writing good flowing easily read script.. I am putting u on my friend list OK? now get out there and let us all see your true talent. Regards Alf

this is excellent work and i would have to agree with brandy make small paragraphs into stanzas..... top 500 for sure: D

I'm a bit harsh with poetry so i have a few suggestions. you have good word choice and line breaks but i think you could have a few stanzas (like paragragh) and the writer who does not punctuate neglects the inrest of their reader. so punctuate. if you compare my old and new ones you'll see that once i started writing with punctuation it was better. maybe you'll move up in the top 500. i like the theme and stuff though. don't change the words just the grammar

This woderful piece should be in first 500, no doubt about it. A poingnent thoughts. Excellent.10 for you.

Hey Aden, you dragged me right down to your web of entangled love.I can feel it too bro.Good job bro!

Really cool. If you'd have used paragraphs it would be way more interesting. Great words, though.9/10

fantastic poem written from the heart you really put your emotion on the page. Nice one

brutally honest, intense expression, been in a similar state of mind before so I can kinda relate

Such a wonderful 'expression'. A self reflective. Nice work. Well written.

I can see why this poem is so popular....great work!

word for word, God has hreathed upon you. never say you are this or not that. it is a disappointment to him who has created you with his own hands to be a poet and you listen to 'em who say you aint. what do you call a person who makes pots? what do you call a person who arrages flowers? what do you call a person who makes furniture? what do you call a person who drives a car? see? everyone have their name. tell me that you are a poet. your works speak value. Keep it up. I pray to know you more. paul mugano

Wow i absolutely love this poem. Your an amazing poet, keep writing and i'll keep reading.

lol Wow thats soo good I can understand how you got on the top 500 Thats amazing You could get so many scholarships for your work You're going to be successful Keep it up..