Wednesday, October 29, 2008

Exploration: Other States Comments

Rating: 5.0

notes lie crumpled in your hands,
frown split lips spill forth your sobs,
as eyes - soft focus look beyond
the clouding veil of life.
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Christopher Withers
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Caroline Weeks 29 October 2008

Wow. This is darkly beautiful. The words you used really evoke powerful emotions. 'thumping from te door makes up missing beats from your chest' That is a freaking awesome line. Great work! 10 +++

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