Saturday, May 10, 2008

Evading Tears Comments

Rating: 5.0

I'm walking through a valley
where everything is bright.
No more anger or depression,
nor hot tears of spite.
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Julie Neises
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Rani Turton 23 May 2008

The passion and pain, tears and falling rain have all been put together beautifully. Keep writing, you have a real talent.

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Stone Granite 11 May 2008

Julie (or Jules, as I like to call you) - This is a fantastic poem and is indicative of your talents as a poet. For starters, the title is awesome. Your brightness is gradually changed by the feelings that forever loom within you, only to become more desperate with each subsequent realization. It is the desperation I seem to be transfixed by. Simply put, it is awesome. A 10! ! Stone

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Marvin Brato 10 May 2008

Nice poem expressing passion, though sad yet captivating! High marks.

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