Thursday, July 26, 2007

Escape Comments

Rating: 5.0

we drive miles away
gravel road, interstates fly by,
she has a tattoo of a dove
on her hip, in flight
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Ben Partenay
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Joseph Daly 28 July 2007

Ben, I like this a lot. The contenrtainly drives tyhe form, or shoulg that be the other way around? The energy to this well contained. For me the line that stands out is 'she has a tattoo of a dove'. The is a strong sense of irony underlying this.

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Alison Cassidy 27 July 2007

Raw, strong, angry words - you pen desperation exceeding well. Fine piece. love, Allie xxxx

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