Thursday, April 17, 2008

Ergonomic Split Comments

Rating: 5.0

She’s like
An
elevating elevator,
While
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David DeSantis
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Onelia Avelar 29 April 2008

Wonderful new metaphors - aren`t they? - 'Elevator elevating', 'ergonomic', they have been just waiting to become poetry. I like your style!

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Original Unknown Girl 28 April 2008

Ooh la la! ! ! Love it, very punchy, to the point, fun poem! ! ! HG: -) xx

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Emancipation Planz 25 April 2008

.. but you left out the escalator that I slide down via A3 paper ... I know an office in a 'scraper meet you there at half past later

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Laoibhse Ni Canain 22 April 2008

I'm laughing out loud in a library - just about as inappropriate as your poem I would say! Charmingly cheeky, particularly the off-white paper. Come on Yuri, just a little extension of the imagination...

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LOVEFOOL Aka 19 April 2008

I found this piece quite sensual and amusing, is the elevator a metaphor for your bodily rise.? I'm never disapointed when I read your work thanks Nik

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Jurietta Duraan 17 April 2008

Well, the elevator can only go up from here! Very good, my friend, , different again than your others... I like your versatility- and there is tongue-in-the-cheek humour there as well.... what's up with the off-white paper?

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Abha Sharma 17 April 2008

the ergonomics are beautifully designed....your mechanics will surely force your elevator...in poetics as well.. interesting and spontaneous..

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David DeSantis

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