hear the music love the beat
running outside to dance in the streets
see the birds chirping there?
going outside to get fresh air
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I like the rhythm. So pleasing to the ear. Feedback: try not to end your writing pieces with 'I have to leave' or something like that. I learned that from experience so I am not criticizing you in the least. I've dont it before. I like your work.
I like this poem :) C.G.