Friday, April 17, 2009

Encircled Triage Comments

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Life is an empty abode
Built on the verge of
An invisible road
Leading to perpetual death
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Naseer Ahmed Nasir
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Alex Sarich 25 January 2017

you write the truth, nicely written.

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Sonali Ganguly 16 January 2016

nice lines sir...short but expresses a deep thought.

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Seema Chowdhury 22 July 2015

An engaging write, nicely composed.

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Emma Adamyan 03 July 2009

the shot(poem) hits the target

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Cindy Kreiner Sera 01 May 2009

Yes, the only thing we are sure of is death- when our moment comes...nature goes on doing what it has done from the beginning of time - they are better off than we humans but we interfere with them too....good write this. Thank you Cindy

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Supriya Prathapan 01 May 2009

So very true. Most of the time we do not where our life is going. We all know that we are going to die one day, yet we always want to heap more and more material possessions.

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Nikki White 01 May 2009

i like it says alot brings me to think of life and how it is today

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Dagmara Anna 28 April 2009

Very much I like your poem. A truth is included in it. Nice you wrote, really. Thank you. Greetings. (10v.) Dagmara Anna

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Elaine Oxamendi Vicet 26 April 2009

So much to ponder on..as it is not only written with a metaphysical overtone but we order our lives like that..what is most important we prioritise and clinically too. So much to ponder on here. E

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Noel Horlanda 25 April 2009

short and marvelous enough. You have strange idea about life. Nearly all negatives, no positive. well that's your way, I can't change it.

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Alison Cassidy 25 April 2009

You certainly don't waste words in this insightful poem about life and death and the limited choices we humans may make on our journey. Your use of triage as a metaphor for prioritizing is most interesting and certainly encourages this reader pause and reflect. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Glenn La Race Jr 24 April 2009

culture, oh culture, how can you do such a thing to people who obtain you, who choose to make you only emptiness, explain you as ineffable, malicious; pit against others who just follow this illusion of life, and yell, shout, scream with only a resonance of someone elses voice, they can't even see. i like it.

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Obed Souza 23 April 2009

Dear poet, It´s due to us to fill life with meaning or emptiness. My concept of life includes many things but it to be empty. All these colors come from man´s heart. And man´s hearts are full of many things. It´s up to us to give or deprive life from itself. May ' itself' be whatever you conceive it to b e. It depends on perspective, where you place yourself is very important on the way you describe and feel things. It seems you were a bit depressed when you wrote this poem, or I might be wrong and didn´t catch the real meaning. Still, I really appreciate your style.

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Catrina Heart 23 April 2009

The color of life's path written in a very nice mataphors...fabulous verses written.

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rago rago 22 April 2009

simple truth.............a good write.

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Taylor S 22 April 2009

Captivating poem. Written by a true poet.

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Aden orie 22 April 2009

Cool poem, i wrote a poem simular to this one, my word vocab isnt this advanced though: P good job

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A very intense philosophical poem Naseer. Well done! Karin Anderson

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Ken E Hall 21 April 2009

This is a sign to live doing what gives you a full life today...no second chances...and the red light is waiting...great message...I'm going to dance all night....regards uavanice1

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Absent Wryta 20 April 2009

Certainly deep. Thought provoking and sadly true. Wise words nicely put together. Good job

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