Empty Heart Comments

And line 11: I'd uses 'dances'. I like the poem, and with more proofreading and perhaps of English [ I THINK English is not your 'main language' ] I would not find myself paying so much attention to English 'errors'. : ) bri

line 6: I'm not sure of the meaning here. line 7: should read 'Its', not 'it's'. line 8: I wouldn't use the second 'that', though I guess it's ok.

line 3: 'you' to 'your' I depend on proofreading to catch (most of) my 'errors'. : ) bri