Tick tock Tick tock
The lazy man stares
Tick tock Tick tock
his time flashes past in haste
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Nelson, a few good images here though some lines are over-written (Wrinkles invade her ornamental face irately) . You might immerse yourself in good contemporary poetry (Billy Collins, Mary Oliver) if you want to improve. If you'd like, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Let me know how you like it. Yrs, JC
A wonderful start from emptiness. Thanks