Saturday, May 27, 2017

Emptiness Comments

Rating: 2.5

Tick tock Tick tock
The lazy man stares
Tick tock Tick tock
his time flashes past in haste
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Nelson Enemuo
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Jazib Kamalvi 16 June 2017

A wonderful start from emptiness. Thanks

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Jefferson Carter 27 May 2017

Nelson, a few good images here though some lines are over-written (Wrinkles invade her ornamental face irately) . You might immerse yourself in good contemporary poetry (Billy Collins, Mary Oliver) if you want to improve. If you'd like, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Let me know how you like it. Yrs, JC

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