Emergency Brake Comments

waking up to reality and 'existing' in the presence of 'beings' is a brilliant analogy.10/10

This is Wonderful reading. Eve on Earth. Your style of Poetry is so unique and holds us till the very end.........10+++

Onelia, Dreamy derives are dangerous here. Poetry is not permitted on roads. They smoke away the roads. LOL cp

very well done, nice poem thanks a lot

The content, presentation, & composition is really different. An exotic taste! The art of writing is so interesting that as a reader I've gone through this poem from strarting to the end with the curicity. And finally, I've got a marvellous taste & offered my 10. B-e-a-t-i-f-u-l!

I really like this episode Onelia. I can identify with it. Do you write poems while driving, like I do? The cops can't catch you doing it (chanting the lines to revise and remember them when you can stop to write them down) - it could be classed as dangerous driving but it makes a long journey short!

this reminded me of the beatles 'a day in the life', especially the part when the politician is either daydreaming, or 'mind blown off' in the car....i like how you veer back and forth, eden to 21st century...nice one

Car, dream and consciousness.........excellent imagery and narration

You mean they don't have motor vehicle traffic in the Garden of Eden? Love the alliterative final strophe... Rgds, Ivan

Ahhhh...the hustle and bustle of life intruding upon our dreams of solitude and 'get out of the way you a********'...very descriptive...Coach

Ah Eve...expelled from the perfect paradise of your dreams to the rude awakening of this rude modern world. Keep dreaming your persistently playful poems but...watch your step! love donall donall

This is lovely, though I don't suppose I should say that. It's not lovely that you had a little accident, it is lovely though the way that you phrase such events. Sending over an ether hug just in case... HG: -) xx

It is a well scripted emergency brake on day dreams from one exotic paradise to worldly blocks of cops or(I guess angelic cops so you escape....from interesting drive dreams to real roads of 21st Century. It is so splendid a write Onelia. Rgs Rema

Our dear One had an accident. So I shall send her a kiss surplus from my Catullus's translation. The Latin poet told well our ambivalences towards the sweetheart. The dynamic of this poem is violent and there's a feeling of death. That's another reason for sending her a kiss.

As you say, in our minds all is green grass and hillsides and the only hum is of the droning bees. Just back from Glastonbury - perhaps I'm still intoxicated! Fx