Elocution Comments

A well articulated piece of poetry nicely embellished with poetic rhyme and rhythm. An insightful creation.

2 – i like the rhyming throughout, but some parts are not 'clear', and i don't think " elocution" is to be used as you used it. bri :)

1- i liked: " Like a chump in the dump of depressing debris I may slump from the bump when my bike hits a tree And blame the first person I happen to see Without seeing the problem is actually me Through shades of the morning and blades full of dew When sun rays on blue days make shadows of you" esp. the d/d/d alliteration.

Well said Bryan! Courage, who cannot use a double dose of that! Those last two lines, great ending or perhaps a new beginning.

Bryan, such a well crafted poem👍👍👍