Eclipse Comments

Hi valsa, I hope you are well, Really the pen is speechless to write anything about this lovely poem, every things in it are beautiful and heart touching, it is very poignant and well penned, honestly we can find here some true poetic phrases written by the ink of a big heart full of love and loyalty, I like your fantasy metaphoric style which is different than the many others, it deserves a full mark and top place on my fav list

Watching the sunlight dancing through the smoky vapour With every droplet mirroring a spectrum of shades And sat dreaming of a time when we will be made man and wife Never knowing you would vanish out from my sky like a rainbow.

wonder if love adrift and lost in the air

You were like a candle that glowed luminous Emitting undeniable light of love and warmth Your grace was like fresh snow gently falling On the fringes of leaves and the petals of roses

I see my sky suddenly turning Stygian black.

Exquisite joy of being in love, exquisite grief when love is lost. The pendulum swung evenly here in this poem, showing the two horribly equal depths of both sides of love. 10++++++++++++++++

I appreciate the elaborate analytical appreciation of the poem by Dr Pintu Mahakul. Kudos to him also, along with the poetess.

I do not know whether the poem is a reflection of the poet's own personal account, I hope not, and if not, it is indeed a masterpiece work, as poet Parameswaran Nair Damodaran Nair has rightly said, because it is not an easy job to describe with so much of heartfelt emotion someone else's feelings, and so eloquentely. The poem gets 10/10 from me, and it goes to 'MYPoemList'.

What a beautiful, poetic imagery. An excellent poem with an apt title and graphic. 'And you shone on me like the light of a harvest moon' - so poetically put, I am simply amazed!

Does " jumping cataract" act as a metaphor for the progressing old-age, or rain of some sort, or is it related to the eclipse? Just wondering.

Eclipse……Remarkable beginning and fabulous ending. Very enlightening poem, beautifully composed. Thanks for sharing, Valsa.10+

You were like a candle that glowed luminous Emitting undeniable light of love and warmth Your grace was like fresh snow gently falling On the fringes of leaves and the petals of roses And you shone on me like the light of a harvest moon all other comments are like makhan except those contained in your own version one of true reality poetess

Emitting undeniable light of love we can feel life better at each moment of life. Every life is like homing bird and we feel the beauty of returning home with love during sunset and exploring love during sunrise. This poem is splendid.

Another masterpiece from the blessed pen of the celebrated Valsa George iEvery stanza of the poem carries a gem in it so precious and beautiful. The dreams of lovers, the delight of love, the lonliness and the longing for reunion are all otstandingly crafted. To my poem list

Should the perception be " when I see the homing bird coming to join its mate, and when I listen to the notes of a nightingale..." or " when I see the homing bird coming to join its mate and listening to the notes of a nightingale..." (in the latter, the narrator just " sees" while the bird " comes to join its mate" and " listens to a nightingale" ;) ?

Regardless, it seems that I have spotted an ambiguous construction, and I importune you for clarification. At the beginning of the third stanza. (cont.)

A poem that evinces the throes associated with loss of love and beloved. I had always believed that it was a rhyming scheme that bludgeons a poem to culminate, but, certainly, I was wrong. Very near to the acme of expression.

How we used to sit by the side of a jumping cataract Watching the sunlight dancing through the smoky vapour With every droplet mirroring a spectrum of shades And sat dreaming of a time when we will be made man and wife Never knowing you would vanish out from my sky like a rainbow...... fantastic beginning with thrilling expression. Marvelous work.

Impressive poetry Valsa Thank you for sharing Mario Odekerken

An outstanding poem. Well composed and well conveyed.....10++++