Echoes Comments

yes, very powerful. i have been trying to write like that - short, succinct, and strong. i wish i could do that one day.

Strong, clear words I like this write.

I like your lubricated words, a lot. And your lubricated words. Good imagery here. Then you go to 'liquid crack' Since your first line begins with 'heard', perhaps your second image should begin with 'I have seen.' This is a terrific write and I enjoyed reading it, very imaginative and powerful. alicia

sensitively written. more to explore here alfredo.

Alfredo, I understand exactly where you are coming from. A strong poem. I liked it. Keep writing my friend. David

Alfredo>>>Solid Work here...poignant statement....striking written elocution... Crisp, tight, fluxive verse construction...Job well done, Sir... ~ F. j. R. ~

I can definitely feel you from that side......preach on.