Early Morning Comments

Sorry, I may be half asleep today, but this poem doesn't make much sense to me. Anthony, I did notice one mistake that you will want to fix. Last line, first verse is missing an apostrophe: Does she know of her boyfriend's addiction?

Don't send flowers, donate them to guilt.. very unique and interesting phrases used in this poem. thanks for sharing.

This reminds me of a lot of East Asian poetry - a joining of fragmentary images and impressions.

Her eyes open The bliss of her portrait is shelved I wish I could resolve with her the teeth that chew My requirements. ... really liked it.....

I liked your poem. It seems like you see all this in a dream. You have a great mind for imagineary thought. You have what it takes to also write a story book. Keep up the good work. Keep me posted on your plans. Always remember Jesus loves you and God does to. God also answers prayers.

Anthony, you e-mailed me about this poem...I really liked it...up until the penultimate line which seemed to spoil the pleasing semi-random, semi-thematical flow. I would suggest a lengthening of the poem to appropriately bookend an otherwise very attractive piece.

Interesting and attractive imagery rather like a dream.

The first section drew me in with its lovely images of the girl and the thought you inserted about her boyfriend. After that you lost me. I kept wondering, why paint the beautiful picture and then not refer to it but fleetingly in the last section? Maybe I'm missing something basic here, but if I am, the odds are other readers are too. Some memorable images, but no connecting thread.

This is quite an interesting and unusual poem. Meaning I read a lot of things into it that may not be there... I like everything about the poem except the use of 'insane' where it is used. There needs to be a different word. H