Early Morning Darkness Comments

thanks for a true to life story, john

In the early morning darkness in this line a beautiful contrast of imagery When time was yet to come and here another playful style of the past, present, future in one In frozen air suspended wow for the double negative -the contrast yet complement of reality Every sound was fast a-sleep and the final of them -the focal point of the poem, the end of its begenning. nice work....

I feel like this is the beginning of a saga :)

Excellent Goran. Again the theme of the search for the ultimate meaning of life rings through.

Vivid imagery as i saw your story unfold in my mind. A dreamy story that gleams with truth. Thank you for sharing, i shall be back for more. :)

fantastic imagery.....one of your best. 10

Hi Göran Having read a number of your poems, this is one of my favoirutes. I like your descriptive powers here, the sense of enigma running throughout the poem and the idea of progression as the poem unfurls its 'secret' story. Keep up the good work. Oh and as Chrismas is coming up: God jul och gott nytt år. Jonathan

And in the dream images the depths of the soul is released.Very nice.Another ten.

Verbeautiful poem at fast tempo.

All hidden secrets were revealed In my heart a pounding sound was felt hidden secrets when whispers passion seems to resound by the glow, excellent exposition rhythm by the heart being enligtened, breath reasons to be resonant by the sound, wonderful write by unique imagery,10+++, thanks for sharing

Great use of imagery, beautifully written.

I think this one is a great write. Nicely said. God Bless, Linda

A nicely phrased, lyrical poem (reminiscent of Coleridge) with a strong spiritual message. Some great metaphors too: 'Every sound was fast asleep' and 'touched the sleeping mind' You convey the sense of awe and wonder at nature's magnificence with great skill. My only criticism is your use of the rather wooden word 'got' which seems out of place somehow. Perhaps 'rang' out of tune in stanza three and the sun 'crept' out of sight in stanza four? Just a suggestion. Lovely poem otherwise. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

Hello Goran and you are right. I enjoyed this delightful work, well done my good poet friend. Have a great evening! Loyd